How copy-editing can change the world

August 16, 2006 at 2:14 pm (Uncategorized)

I got a chance to cane this annoying opening paragraph in a piece about radio in the Middle East in an ad trade title I’m working on. The claim about “generally the same culture” was fantastic. Bring on Bernard Lewis.

BEFORE
“Despite being united by one language and, generally, the same culture, the Middle East has limited pan-regional radio broadcasting. To date only foreign broadcasters have managed to provide regional radio stations, be it the UK (BBC Arabic), France (Radio Monte Carlo) or the US (Radio Sawa)…”

AFTER :0)
“The Arabic-speaking Middle East has limited pan-regional radio broadcasting, an area traditionally dominated by foreign broadcasters such as BBC Arabic in the UK, Radio Monte Carlo in France or Radio Sawa in the US.”

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1 Comment

  1. AA said,

    Well edited!

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